What is GREedge?
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Statement of Purpose (SOP)
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SOP Rating Parameters
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SOP Timeline
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SOP Analysis based on Rating Parameters
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CONTENTS
Chapter 1 What is GREedge?
What is GREedge? GREedge is India’s largest Online Academy that focuses on providing personalized expert guidance for better GRE scores and best admits from top universities based on your profile. The GREedge admission counseling team provides complete support from A to Z of your admission application. Starting from university short listing to drafting compelling SOPs and even VISA processing, our dedicated team of personal admission experts ensures you receive best possible admits for your profile!
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69% of our students are completely happy with the SOP they have received! *This data is calculated for the year 2015-2016. **This data is calculated for the current Financial Year
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Admission SFA Your Personal Mentor and Guide to tirelessly help you, guide you, motivate you and cater to all your university admissions related needs and queries throughout your Admission Process.
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Chapter 2 Statement of Purpose
Statement of Purpose (SOP) As the name signifies, the Statement of Purpose is your personal statement about: • Who you are, • What you’ve done professionally and academically so far, • Who or what has been your major influence, and • Where you plan to take your career from here.
Your SOP is your chance to make yourself stand out from a crowd of people with similar educational qualifications as yours. It gives you an opportunity to portray your intent and desire to learn, prove your worth, and convey why you are the perfect candidate for the respective course. Every GRE aspirant works hard to score high in GRE. But that is often not the case with SOP. People tend to put off writing the SOP or essay and delay till the last minute. They often wind up with the near-perfect essays found in admission guidebooks.
Steps to write a good SOP Word limit The length of SOPs is generally specified by the respective university. Mostly it lies between 500 and 1000 words. If the university does not specify the world limit, try to keep it within 1000 words. In any case, don’t exceed 1200 words.
Keep it simple Bold, italics, underlined, unnecessary footers and headers, numerous highlights and font changes are a no! They hamper readability to a great extent. Keep it simple, clean, and professional.
Begin with a catchy paragraph The admissions committee wants to learn about you. They would like to see you, beyond the numbers and grades. Reveal your personality through your Statement of Purpose (SOP). The admissions committee reads more than 40 SOPs at a time. Catch their attention with the first few lines. Your SOP is your first personal contact with the admissions committee. Use it to distinguish yourself.
Don’t share too much Avoid providing any personal details that are not asked for. Share data that is relevant to your MS, for example, talk about your chosen field of study, area of interest, etc.
Steps to write a good SOP Extra-curricular activities Whether it is sports, theater work, or administrative work at cultural festivals, mention why you participated in those events and how they helped in shaping your personality. Make sure you mention the challenges you overcame and the life lessons/skills you learned.
Co-curricular activities Major paper publications, presentations, R&D experience, guest lectures, workshops etc., can provide a boost to your SOP.
No unnecessary flattery The professors and the faculty members are well aware of the quality of education they offer. What the university is looking for is to understand what your aspirations are and what you bring to the table. Remember your SOP is about describing you and not extolling the virtues of the university and its faculty!
Common SOP Mistakes The problem of delaying : People tend to put off writing the SOP or essay and delay till the last minute. They often wind up with the near-perfect essays found in admission guidebooks. After countless sessions, finding the one distinguishing factor for your SOP can be very difficult. Not to mention, struggling through an ocean of Dos and Don’ts. Then come the first, second, and umpteen drafts for the SOP, which could quite tire you out.
The problem of hurrying: When the admission deadlines rapidly approach, aspirants hurry up with their SOP. This step of drafting SOPs shouldn't be hurried at all. Proper planning is required to draft an SOP, as it determines how you present your before the admissions committee. Proper planning can give you enough time to create and submit a well-written and carefully put together SOP. Starting early gives you the opportunity to get the SOP proof read a couple of times before sending it across.
Chapter 3
SOP Rating Parameters (The SOP rating framework that has been used here is not what the university uses. It is a guideline that we use to constantly analyze and improve the content)
SOP Rating Parameters
• Structure • Content • Flow • Language • Knowledge • Authenticity
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SOP Rating Parameter Structure The SOP is an essay written by the applicant to the professor. Therefore, as an applicant, you must ensure that the structure of your SOP is right . The structure of the SOP is the backbone without which the entire SOP will collapse. So, try your best to have the right structure. You can keep the following points in mind, while you decide the structure of the SOP:
Have a gripping introductory paragraph
Start with what you are doing right now and then proceed to explain why you are applying for the course. Make it a point to keep the introduction genuine. If required, you can also make an opening with a quote.
Highlight your academic achievements
After you have a gripping introduction, you need to get highlight your academic achievements. You need to ensure that you have chronologically listed your academic achievements.
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SOP Rating Parameter Structure Highlight your professional achievements Once you highlight your academic achievements, you must define your professional achievements. Make is a point to also highlight how you had evolved in your professional life.
Bring out your future plans and career goals This is the most decisive part of the content of the SOP. You need to extensively highlight your academic and career goals. Universities look for applicants with a realistic goal. So, highlight your goals in a realistic manner and point your qualities that would lead you to your goals.
Make an impactful conclusion You need to make a roundup of all your qualities that reflect your character and motivation. Finally, you must conclude by mentioning what you expect from the university and the specific program. And always have a confident tone that portrays that you are aware of the course you are applying for!
SOP Rating Parameter Content The content of the SOP is nothing but the roundup of all your academic and non-academic experience. So, the content must convey your passion. The content of your SOP must be straightforward and honest. You must make it a point to differentiate your resume from you SOP. While your resume is merely a collection of facts about you, your SOP is the through behind those facts. Therefore, ensure that the content of your SOP is well balanced and it covers all relevant points. You can keep the following pointers in mind while as you draft the content of your SOP:
Cover all your goals in the Statement of Purpose Your goals play an important role in determining the status of your application. Having clarity about your own goals is of utmost importance.
You can further break down your goals into the following sub points. 1. Academic goals 2. Career goals
SOP Rating Parameter Content Make it a point to address all vital questions like: 1. 2. 3. 4.
Why did you narrow down on the particular university? Why did you zero in on the particular course? Why should the university shortlist you? How will the course help me achieve you achieve your goals?
In short, the content of your SOP must highlight your passion!
SOP Rating Parameter Flow A convincing and persuasive Statement of Purpose with a great structure fails to make a mark if the flow of the SOP is absent. Therefore, you need to draft a SOP that has the perfect structure and flow. The flow of the SOP is nothing but the way you show the transition of the content. While the structure of the SOP clearly states how you should draft the SOP, the flow should reflect the transition. So, make it a point to chronologically reflect your credentials. Ensure that you maintain coherence within your SOP to increase readability and make it easier to understand.
Keep the transition smooth!
SOP Rating Parameter Language You must adopt the management style of writing. Ensure that you have “Less words, More clarity”. But, be sure that you do not compromise on any vital data too. So, have a simple tone and avoid grammatical errors. You can keep the following pointers in mind while determining the language of your SOP. 1. Be strong in Grammar, spelling and vocabulary. Do not use complicated or flowery words but have a simple yet convincing language. And, at no point deviate from the grammatical rules. 2. Have concise and precise sentences and ensure that all your sentences are of the optimal size. Always adopt an active voice and try your best to avoid passive voice. Adopting an active voice portrays the fact that you have written the Statement of Purpose with focus and conviction.
So, always follow the rules!
SOP Rating Parameter Knowledge Reflecting your knowledge in your SOP is one vital aspect. You need to ensure that your knowledge about your chosen subject is highlighted. You can support this by suitably quoting your work-experience, adding emphasize to your internships and making a striking point about your project work.
In short, universities and admission committees look into your SOP to assess your academic knowledge. Therefore, highlight your academic and subject knowledge by making impactful statements with your academic knowledge.
Reflect your knowledge!
SOP Rating Parameter Authenticity Authenticity of your SOP is one vital element that every university look into. Being authentic essentially states that you must not fabricate any element in your SOP. Make your SOP honest and candid. Avoid adding anecdotes that do not fit. Your honesty will definitely be appreciated at all times.
So, be genuine always!
Chapter 4 SOP Timeline
SOP Timeline 1
GET YOUR GREY MATTER ACTIVATED
Start with an intense brainstorming session. Assess yourself and formulate a short questionnaire. Once you are done with the questionnaire, get a set of questions ready that will help you draft a flawless SOP.
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USE THE PEN AND PAPER
Nothing beats the age old method of using the pen and the paper to draft a rough SOP. Get all your thoughts processed and draft a structure to your SOP.
MAKE THE FINAL TWEAKS
Once you get your first draft ready, read through it to remove all grammatical errors. Also, ensure that your essay is tight is free from any glaring loopholes
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GET IT REVIEWED BY THE EXPERTS
We certainly know that you are right! But, you need to affirm that fact too. Get your SOP assessed from experts who will tell you all the strategies to craft a perfect SOP.
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GET SET TO MAKE YOUR APPLICATION YOU HAVE YOUR WINNING SOP!
Rough Draft - SOP (What the student wrote) I am a working professional with 5 years experience in IT industry. I always aspired to do my higher studies. So I would like to take forward the experience that I already have and do a course which would enhance my ability and provide a wide exposure in my career. I particularly chose MIS or business analytics ,since it has management subjects in it ,which I am really interested in. I wanted to do my MBA as I see that it is better to choose a course which gives a good weight to work experience and can practically be useful in the course of study. During btech I was in the organizing committee of ISTE(it is a student chapter). In my college we conducted several events under this chapter, here the crucial role I played was that ,I channelized the way it had to work. I formulated different divisions for organizing the event .which are script making, anchoring, campaigning, student management, prize and certificate distribution, faculty coordination. This took of in a great way and we trained our juniors in the same method. The number actually tripled and they were able to organize it better than us which made me very happy. in the organization ,as I am senior member in the team ,I trained new members of the team in my area of expertise and the knowledge transfer is a constant process. I presented papers during btech on artificial neural networks for enose in the event trance 08 (a national level student technical symposium) and won second prize. I did two projects during my btech. 1.automatic room light controller 2.finger print based attendance system Both are microcontroller based projects. Second one is my main project. In this we got a bio metric module to authenticate students and calculate attendance based on it. I was the team leader for the project .We were a batch of four, we had to program, integrate and document the project. I worked in Sweden for 10 months. I was a part of task force during that tenure where i had team mates working from Russia, Sweden and America. We had to coordinate and had to arrive on a common solution. I would like to mention how i got inspired to study management subjects. I realized that I was good at management ,when I was in college ,when i was an organizer and volunteer .Also, I strongly decided to do it when I worked in Sweden, during my onsite tenure because of the international exposure. I would like to see myself as a independent consultant .I am generally interested in consolidating, streamlining and forming processes for any existing system. I would like to be a part of startups and NGOs which work towards the child education.
Expert Inputs – Final SOP (Crafted by GREedge experts)
Initial Draft I presented papers during btech on artificial neural networks for enose in the event trance 08 (a national level student technical symposium) and won second prize.
Final Draft Interest on artificial neural networks for enose opened up a new vista to present my ideas on it during a national level student technical symposium called ‘trance 08’. I was awarded the second prize and also received great appreciations from my professors for the idea and way of presentation.
Initial Draft I worked in Sweden for 10 months. I was a part of task force during that tenure where i had team mates working from Russia, Sweden and America. We had to coordinate and had to arrive on a common solution.
Final Draft The opportunity to work in Sweden for a period of ten months in a task force helped me to understand the role of a manager and the importance of addressing a critical problem in a poised manner, which fueled my interest in pursuing this extensive field, and progress professionally and contribute to the ever evolving field of management information systems.
Expert Inputs – Final SOP (Crafted by GREedge experts)
Initial Draft I am a working professional with 5 years experience in IT industry. I always aspired to do my higher studies. So I would like to take forward the experience that I already have and do a course which would enhance my ability and provide a wide exposure in my career.
Final Draft My professional tenure of five years in the IT industry has not only left me a competent professional, but also a passionate aspirant in the field of Information Systems. I am not content with merely supporting systems but wish to lead and initiate with my knowledge and original ideas in the systems.
Initial Draft I would like to see myself as a independent consultant .I am generally interested in consolidating, streamlining and forming processes for any existing system. I would like to be a part of startups and NGOs which work towards the child education .
Final Draft My long term goal is become an independent consultant and be a part of a startup company or an NGO which work towards the child education
Expert Inputs – Final SOP (Crafted by GREedge experts)
Initial Draft I did two projects during my btech. 1. Automatic room light controller 2. Finger print based attendance system Both are microcontroller based projects.
Final Draft As an inquisitive person I was keen to implement my learning, and therefore engaged in project works throughout my UG program. I worked on innovative topics like ‘Automatic Room Light Controller’ and ‘Finger Print Based Attendance System’ both based on microcontroller.
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Chapter 5
SOP Analysis based on Rating Parameters
SAMPLE SOP 1 Life is like a parabola, it has its ups and downs and you spend most of your time trying to find the point – Anonymous My life could be described using this metaphorical parabola wherein the ups flipped my confidence, and the downs taught me life lessons to learn and carry forward. While I was aware of the significance that academics hold in one’s life, I also realized the importance of having a sense of direction. My efforts and interests were harnessed in the right direction during my one month summer internship in the construction of a coal power plant at ESSAR Projects. I not only gained a lot of practical experience but some reality checks altered my academic aspect for the better. I received experience in all aspects of Construction i.e. Civil, Mechanical, and Electrical. Mainly I was involved in reviewing the planning aspects of construction and its execution. It was then, that I realized the importance of proper planning and scheduling, devoid of which, insurmountable losses eventuate. From then on, I decided to embark on a journey to become an expert in the field of Construction Management that would demand an enhancement of my engineering and leadership skills for which I decided to pursue MS in Construction Management. After the internship, I evolved as a mature aspirant in the field with specific areas of interest such as Project Scheduling, learning new Mathematical Models and Time Optimization techniques in Construction. My dedication in construction management also won recognition from various professors who offered valuable suggestions and guidance for my future aspirations in the field.
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SAMPLE SOP 1 Following the discussions, I started achieving several small milestones in my field of interest by undertaking related projects and gaining experience and knowledge. One such influential project was Analysis of Irrigation Networks using Analytical Hierarchical Process mathematical model for assessing the Global Water Productivity (GWP) status of irrigation networks. Another notable project was Designing Self – Supporting Steel Chimney in which a simplified chimney design was created, taking Paradip, Odisha, India as the place of study. The place demanded a short heat up period and low thermal capacity and so a steel chimney was chosen above all other types. My undergraduate thesis project was entitled Schedule Optimization of Construction Projects using Location Based Management System(LBMS). In this project, a schedule of a residential project using Critical Path Method and Location Based Management Concept, was prepared. The two techniques were hence compared and optimized using a mathematical model named Analytical Hierarchical Process by determining the consistency ratios. The final conclusion was that the LBMS technique is indeed a more suitable technique for scheduling, as it combines similar locations where activities could be started and advanced concurrently. Hence saving a lot of time as compared to the CPM technique, where resources need to be dedicated to different activities.
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SAMPLE SOP 1 The last two years of my undergraduate study has made me research oriented and I made it my ambition to become dexterous in the field of Construction Management. The graduate program at XXXX University stands as a perfect match for my aspirations in this field. The extensive curriculum will definitely provide me with the proficiency I need to gain an expertise in the field. Through this course I want to specialize in Construction Management and augment my skills in advanced software. I have the tenacity, grit and determination to meet your standard of research excellence. I am also impressed with the research works of Prof.XXX in YYY domain, where I also find my strongest penchant. Given the opportunity to be his Research Assistant, I can prove myself an indispensable aid to the team as well as hone my research skills for future pursuits. My dream is to become an expert in the field of Construction Management, where I wish to develop new and improved techniques that could in turn permute the Construction Industry and cut down the huge losses suffered by the industry due to inappropriate or outdated methods in construction. Hence I plan to pursue PhD after my MS. As a citizen of a culturally diverse country with the exposure of working with innumerable group projects during my undergraduate studies; I am confident that I am equipped to get along with my peers in a graduate school which is a concoction of different cultures. In light of my earnest interest and valuable experience, I hope you will see in me a deserving candidate to study at your excellent seat of knowledge with full financial aid and assistantship. I assure you of my dedicated efforts that will prove me as an outstanding student in your program.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Structure - Introduction 9/10
Experts from the SOP “My life could be described using this metaphorical parabola wherein the ups filliped my confidence, and the downs taught me life lessons to learn and carry forward.”
Strengths Dramatic introduction to capture the reader's attention.
Weakness Does not elaborate the presence of 6 backlogs. Must always acknowledge the reasons for backlogs and the learning's gained from it
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Structure – Academic Achievements 10/10
Experts from the SOP “One such influential project was Analysis of Irrigation Networks using Analytical Hierarchical Process mathematical model for assessing the Global Water Productivity (GWP) status of irrigation networks. Another notable project was Designing Self – Supporting Steel Chimney in which a simplified chimney design was created, taking Paradip, Odisha, India as the place of study”
Strengths Inclusion of relevant projects and internships that led to the development of inspiration and preliminary skill for pursuing higher education abroad
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Structure - Professional Achievements 10/10
Experts from the SOP “While I was aware of the significance that academics hold in one’s life, I also realized the importance of having a sense of direction. My efforts and interests were harnessed in the right direction during my one month summer internship in the construction of a coal power plant at ESSAR Projects. I not only gained a lot of practical experience but some reality checks altered my academic aspect for the better”
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Structure – Future Plans and Goals 10/10
Experts from the SOP “My dream is to become an expert in the field of Construction Management, where I wish to develop new and improved techniques that could in turn permute the Construction Industry and cut down the huge losses suffered by the industry due to inappropriate or outdated methods in construction. Hence I plan to pursue PhD after my MS”
Strengths Long terms goals to put knowledge to innovative use.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Structure – Conclusion 8/10
Experts from the SOP “As a citizen of a culturally diverse country with the exposure of working with innumerable group projects during my undergraduate studies; I am confident that I am equipped to get along with my peers in a graduate school which is a concoction of different cultures”
Strengths Important factor to mention in the SOP.
Weakness However, it is not a very persuasive conclusion.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Content – Academic Goals 9/10
Experts from the SOP “From then on, I decided to embark on a journey to become an expert in the field of Construction Management that would demand an enhancement of my engineering and leadership skills for which I decided to pursue MS in Construction Management”
Strengths Good start to the body paragraph by explaining the inspiration without using a fabricated/sensational story
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Content – Career Goals 9/10
Experts from the SOP “My dream is to become an expert in the field of Construction Management, where I wish to develop new and improved techniques that could in turn permute the Construction Industry and cut down the huge losses suffered by the industry due to inappropriate or outdated methods in construction.”
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Content – Why have you chosen this university and course? 8/10
Experts from the SOP “The last two years of my undergraduate study has made me research oriented and I made it my ambition to become dexterous in the field of Construction Management. The graduate program at XXXX University stands as a perfect match for my aspirations in this field. The extensive curriculum will definitely provide me with the proficiency I need to gain an expertise in the field. Through this course I want to specialize in Construction Management and augment my skills in advanced software”
Strengths Clever addition to include software skills along with Construction Management to show broad-minded, realistic view of industry requirements.
Weakness Has not delved into specifics of the course to drive the point home strongly.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Content – How will this course at this particular university help you achieve your goals? 8/10 Experts from the SOP “My dream is to become an expert in the field of Construction Management, where I wish to develop new and improved techniques that could in turn permute the Construction Industry and cut down the huge losses suffered by the industry due to inappropriate or outdated methods in construction. Hence I plan to pursue PhD after my MS”
Weakness Persuasive only because of the long term vision. Again, no specifics to back the answer.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Content – Why are you the perfect candidate for this course at this university? 8/10 Experts from the SOP “I have the tenacity, grit and determination to meet your standard of research excellence. I am also impressed with the research works of Prof.XXX in YYY domain, where I also find my strongest penchant. Given the opportunity to be his Research Assistant, I can prove myself an indispensable aid to the team as well as hone my research skills for future pursuits. As a citizen of a culturally diverse country with the exposure of working with innumerable group projects during my undergraduate studies; I am confident that. I am equipped to get along with my peers in a graduate school which is a concoction of different cultures”
Strengths Apt usage of vocabulary
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Flow of the essay 10/10 Experts from the SOP “From then on, I decided to embark on a journey to become an expert in the field of Construction Management that would demand an enhancement of my engineering and leadership skills for which I decided to pursue MS in Construction Management. Following the discussions, I started achieving several small milestones in my field of interest by undertaking related projects and gaining experience and knowledge. One such influential project was Analysis of Irrigation Networks using Analytical Hierarchical Process mathematical model for assessing the Global Water Productivity (GWP) status of irrigation networks. Another notable project was Designing Self – Supporting Steel Chimney in which a simplified chimney design was created, taking Paradip, Odisha, India as the place of study”
Strengths Usage of transition words to keep the flow of body paragraphs smooth
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Language - Vocabulary 10/10 Experts from the SOP “It was then, that I realized the importance of proper planning and scheduling, devoid of which, insurmountable losses eventuate. The last two years of my undergraduate study has made me research oriented and I made it my ambition to become dexterous in the field of Construction. My dream is to become an expert in the field of Construction Management, where I wish to develop new and improved techniques that could in turn permute the Construction Industry and cut down the huge losses suffered by the industry due to inappropriate methods in construction. I have the tenacity, grit and determination to meet your standard of research excellence"
Strengths SOP is embellished with just the right amount of words to showcase English language proficiency without sounding too verbose.
Weakness Some words are erroneously used. Examples: 1. My undergraduate thesis project was entitled Schedule Optimization of ... (the correct word is "titled") 2. My life could be described using this metaphorical parabola wherein the ups flipped my confidence, (the correct word is "boosted")
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Language - Grammar 10/10
Experts from the SOP “It was then that I realized the importance of proper planning and scheduling, devoid of which, insurmountable losses eventuate”
Strengths Except for some minor flaws that do not affect the meaning, the grammar is good in this SOP. The tenses are built very well, the sentence constructions are good, and there is concord in the sentences.
Weakness Can improve the use of punctuations.
SAMPLE SOP 2 “Learning over Knowing.” The choice to pursue a career in Business Analytics after completing my undergraduate studies in Engineering was a result of my desire to be part of organizational machinery that supports key strategic and operational decision making. I am always excited at an opportunity to use the fine mixture of logic, maths and programming languages to develop models to aid decision making for process automated and forecasting that will help maximize efficiency and profit. After expanding my conceptual knowledge and gaining industrial exposure through research projects during the MS program in Business Analytics, I plan to develop my career as a successful Data Scientist in the Pharmaceutical industry. After leaving behind a commendable academic school record (among my achievements was my position among the top 100 students in the Grade 10 exam of the West Bengal India Board of Secondary Education), I began my undergraduate studies in Computer Science and Engineering from Birla Institute of Technology and Science - Pilani, Dubai (UAE) Campus. The courses on OOP and programming, prepared me to grasp R and Python, DBMS development, Big Data and their applications. My learning from the courses on OR, Optimization and Statistics turned out to be crucial for my work at Mu Sigma. My academic inclination continued to produce results. I completed the UG program with a CGPA of 9.04/10 and was placed in my class. As part of my internship at Larsen and Tubro (UAE), I worked on insightful projects to develop Data Analytics tools as a part of a two member Software Development team. We developed applications for generating Crystal reports, and a tool that works hand-in-hand with the PI System to archive data and display live-time reports and trends.
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SAMPLE SOP 2 These were designed to analyze data in real time and so, were crucial for the field teams to generate insights into the utility of their cooling plants. The tools were also to play an instrumental role in the development of strategies for new plants and reduce operational and manufacturing cost. For our Thesis project, my team implemented JIT Model to optimize the stock reserves for an existing assembly line following Kanban and simulate worst-case scenarios including Delivery Delays. The tool will be useful in taking decisions on contingency measures. We developed a simulation tool that uses matrices resulting from a Stochastic Timed Petri Net model of the assembly line to perform the simulation. My internship at the Telecommunication major Bharti Airtel provided insights into the LINUX system, server security and server error monitoring that helped me understand the application of technology for data management. The internship at Think LABS Techno solutions Helped me understand mega microcontrollers and also apply my skills in programming to write sophisticated codes for microcontrollers. After completing the UG program, intending to pursue a career in structured decision making, I joined Mu Sigma Business Solutions, a pioneer in Decision Sciences. Over the last year at Mu Sigma, I had the opportunity to learn about real-time data driven decision making. Initially, I received training in analytic technology such as SAS, R and SQL and learnt the nuances of problem solving. I created a repository of business problems across various industries.
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SAMPLE SOP 2 In the project for a leading US insurance company, we segmented customers product differentiation and cross selling decisions. We also segregate loyal customers and detractors to help marketing decisions. In a project for a pharmaceutical company, we worked on Behavioral Segmentation of the different accounts and physicians for deciding upon an effective marketing program to launch of a Bio-similar drug and also study its effect on the market associated to its generic drug. In another project, we designed and developed a Quick view Dashboard for the client organization to manage their sales force and for the sales personnel to understand different aspects of their performance. At present, I am automating their report generation system in an effort to save costs. From my experience in the Business Analytics industry, I foresee automation to be major area for investment by companies in an effort to increase efficiency and increased process accuracy. It is imperative to allow this by wisely managing energy resources and social implications. Analytics will play a major role in achieving these competing business goals and will also provide me the field to apply my talents The MS program in Business Analytics from .............. , with its incisive courses covering .........., ........ and ............. will be a perfect launching pad for my career. Of special interest to me are the Research Projects of ............ in ............. I wish to contribute to these projects, preferably as a Research Assistant. I also look forward to the MS program for the opportunity to interact with students from the different corners of the world, share their points of view about business and life, and share our cultural heritage.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1
Language - Brevity 9/10
Experts from the SOP 770 words spaced across 10 paragraphs.
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SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Knowledge 10/10
Experts from the SOP “My undergraduate thesis project was entitled Schedule Optimization of Construction Projects using Location Based Management System(LBMS). In this project, a schedule of a residential project using Critical Path Method and Location Based Management Concept, was prepared. The two techniques were hence compared and optimized using a mathematical model named Analytical Hierarchical Process by determining the consistency ratios. The final conclusion was that the LBMS technique is indeed a more suitable technique for scheduling, as it combines similar locations where activities could be started and advanced concurrently. Hence saving a lot of time as compared to the CPM technique, where resources need to be dedicated to different activities” .
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 1 Authenticity 9/10
Experts from the SOP “Life is like a parabola, it has its ups and downs and you spend most of your time trying to find the point – Anonymous My life could be described using this metaphorical parabola wherein the ups filliped my confidence, and the downs taught me life lessons to learn and carry forward. While I was aware of the significance that academics hold in one’s life”
Strengths
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SOP feels authentic due to the inclusion of apt examples, especially for the inspiration for pursuing higher studies in Construction Management
Weakness Should explain the presence of 7 backlogs at the end of the second year and the learning's gained from the experience. Rags to riches kind of approach.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Structure - Introduction 8/10
Experts from the SOP “The choice to pursue a career in Business Analytics, fine mixture of logic, math and programming languages to develop models to aid decision making for process automated …”
Strengths The student has made a compelling start by stating the fact that the chosen field of study. Further, the student’s inherent passion to pursue the subject has been rightly brought out.
Weakness While the student’s passion and interest in the chosen field of study is palpable, the quote he has chosen seems to be clichéd. The student could have either replace the quote or either refrained from using a clichéd quote.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Structure – Academic Achievements 9/10 Experts from the SOP “After leaving behind a commendable academic school record (among my achievements was my position among the top 100 students in the Grade 10), My academic inclination continued to produce results. I completed the UG program with a CGPA of 9.04/10 and was placed in my class”
Strengths The student has made it a point to highlight not just his undergraduate academic achievements but has also touched upon his achievements from school. Moreover, the tone that he has used to project the fact that he was among the top 100 students is genuine and is not superfluous. Hence, the student has used the right tone and right content to point out his academic achievements.
Weakness While the tone that the student is appropriate, the intensity of his achievements seems to be lost. The fact that he ranked among the top 100 students is merely highlighted as an ancillary statement. Had this been brought out to prominence, the academic achievement component would have been flawless
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Structure - Professional Achievements 10/10
Experts from the SOP “I had the opportunity to learn about real-time data driven decision making. Initially, I received training in analytic technology such as SAS, R and SQL and learnt the nuances of problem solving. I created a repository of business problems across various industries”
Strengths The student has rightfully pointed out his professional achievements. He has not only highlighted his learning experience, but has also brought out the challenges he faced. He has indeed aptly summarized his professional achievements.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Structure – Future Plans and Goals 9/10
Experts from the SOP “I look forward to joining the program next fall with full financial aid. I wish to contribute to these projects, preferably as a Research Assistant..”
Strengths The student has summed his goals. He has made it a point to highlight what he wants to do in terms of his academics.
Weakness While all his goals and future plans are extensively covered, the student seems to have just made an emphasize on his academic goals. Had he balanced out his professional and academic goals, the SOP would have made a better impact
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Structure – Conclusion 9/10 Experts from the SOP “I also look forward to the MS program for the opportunity to interact with students from the different corners of the world, share their points of view about business and life, and share our cultural heritage. With an ambition to serve the pharmaceutical industry and through it the public at large, I look forward to joining the program next fall with full financial aid”
Strengths The conclusion seems to be moderately strong. The student just highlights his ambitions in a confident tone. Further, he concludes the SOP by making an emphasis on the fact that targets to join the university with a full financial aid.
Weakness While the student has a confident tone , he could have added details about how the university and the course will help him. While the conclusion is indeed genuine, the student could have added a few of his goals, like a full tuition fee waiver, TA/RA, to further support his passion.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Content – Academic Goals 8/10
Experts from the SOP “I wish to contribute to these projects, preferably as a Research Assistant. I also look forward to the MS program for the opportunity to interact with students from the different corners of the world”
Strengths The student has made is a point to highlight his interest in academics. He has further mentioned the fact that he is interested in taking up Research Assistantships.
Weakness While the student’s interest to pursue a Research Assistantship is pointed out, the student has not explicitly pointed out his academic goals in details. Had the student highlighted all the goals, it would have added more value.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Content – Career Goals 9/10
Experts from the SOP “Ambition to serve the pharmaceutical industry and through it the public at large..”
Strengths The student has highlighted the fact that he has the ambition to serve the pharmaceutical sector and this is indeed precise and to the point.
Weakness While the student has just mentioned about his flair and aspirations to join the pharmaceutical sector, he has not mentioned his career goals specifically. The student has merely highlighted his inclinations for a sector but has refrained from mentioning his particular interest and aspirations.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Content – Why have you chosen this University? 8/10
Experts from the SOP The MS program in Business Analytics from .............. , with its incisive courses covering .........., ........ and ............. will be a perfect launching pad for my career.
Strengths The student has brought out his passion for the course. He has further narrowed down into how the course from the particular university will serve as a launch pad for his career
Weakness While the student has highlighted the benefits that he can derive from the university and the course, the element of how the university will act as a catalyst for his career is missing.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Content – Why have you chosen this Course? 9/10
Experts from the SOP “I believe that the MS program will help me gain an understanding of present real world problems and the skills to develop a structure to attend these challenges”
Strengths The prospects of pursuing a course in Business Analytics has been rightly highlighted by the student. He as also made it a point to show what impact the course can bring about in various industries too.
Weakness Thought the student mentions about the skills and problem solving abilities that the program can give him, he has not made an emphasize of how the course will help him achieve his goals.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Content – How will this course at this particular university help you achieve your goals? 8/10
Experts from the SOP I look forward to joining the program next fall with full financial aid.
Strengths The goals of the students have been mentioned at a great detail. Also, the student speaks extensively about how he looks forward to enroll for the university
Weakness The part which links the student’s goals to the university's mission. There is no apparent sense of connect between the two.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Content – Why are you the perfect candidate for This course at this university? 8/10
Experts from the SOP “From my experience in the Business Analytics, I wish to contribute to these projects”
Strengths The qualities of the student has been rightfully brought out. He has indeed portrayed all his skills and qualities in the appropriate manner.
Weakness Thought the qualities of the student has been mentioned, the element of why the student is the perfect candidate is missing. The student merely speaks about his general skills, but does not mention why he is the ideal candidate.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Flow of the essay 10/10
Experts from the SOP From my experience in the Business Analytics industry, I foresee automation to be major area for investment by companies in an effort to increase efficiency and increased process accuracy
Strengths The flow of the SOP has definitely been dealt with in the right way. From having a gripping introduction to making a short highlight about her school life to her college academics, the student has maintained the right transition. Further, the student has also made the right choice in maintaining the chronology of her achievements, goals and interest. Also, she has dived into the conclusion in a seamless manner.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Language - Vocabulary 10/10
Experts from the SOP “I created a repository of business problems across various industries” “with its incisive courses covering .........., ........ and ............. will be a perfect launching pad for my career.”
Strengths The student has superior vocabulary. His choice of words definitely add finesse to the SOP.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Language - Grammar 10/10
Strengths The essay is grammatically error free. Additionally, the Subject-Verb agreement is maintained throughout the SOP.
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SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Language - Brevity 10/10
Strengths The length of the essay is appropriate. Further, the student has managed to use appropriate words without beating around the bush. Its crisp and intact.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Knowledge 9/10
Experts from the SOP “My internship at the Telecommunication major Bharti Airtel provided insights into the LINUX system, server security and server error monitoring management. The internship at Think LABS Techno solutions helped me understand mega microcontrollers and also apply my skills in programming to write sophisticated codes for microcontrollers..”
Strengths The student seems to have a genuine interest in his chosen field and has definitely demonstrated his knowledge by highlighting his achievements. In the first place, he has made it a point to highlight all his internship and professional experience. Moreover, he has quoted all his experience which supplements the fact that he has indeed acquired the said skills.
Weakness While the student has appropriately highlighted all his knowledge by quoting his internship experiences, he does not take the effort to show how the internships have lead to the enhancement of his knowledge. Though the manner in which the student has drafted his internship experiences is genuine, the impact the internship had on the student is missing.
SOP Analysis Sample SOP 2 Authenticity 10/10
Experts from the SOP “After leaving behind a commendable academic school record (among my achievements was my position among the top 100 students in the Grade 10 exam of the West Bengal India Board of Secondary Education..”
Strengths The student has adopted a confident tone throughout his SOP. He comes off as someone who is genuine and honest. Moreover, the fact that he was among the top 100 students in the West Bengal Board Examinations has been highlighted in the appropriate manner. Moreover, the student does not exaggerate any statement and seems to have all the relevant points in the right place.
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